OMGWOW. Have I mentioned how much I love your characterisation of the Cloudiroth Group? Everyone from Reno to Zack is perfectly characterised--especially Seph. I love how you write Seph, caring so much about Cloud but so very, very confused as to what's happening to him. I think Seph would take being squashed together in one body--becoming one soul--over having to deal with something like this any day.
But then, Seph's been known to be at least a little selfish. Okay, really selfish. Particularly in regards to Cloud. Seph ish teh clingie. And you, my dear, show that perfectly. ^_^
As for editing betalike stuff, I only caught two errors:
“I’m sure he is. The same isn’t familiar to me, but I’m sure you’ll find him." I think you mean name, here.
She ran out of the house, Kairi right on her heals; the pair ignored Elmyra’s surprised calls of concern in favor of speed. This should be heels, in reference to feet rather than recovery. Although in Aerith's case you can't really be sure....
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Date: 2006-06-21 04:42 pm (UTC)But then, Seph's been known to be at least a little selfish. Okay, really selfish. Particularly in regards to Cloud. Seph ish teh clingie. And you, my dear, show that perfectly. ^_^
As for editing betalike stuff, I only caught two errors:
“I’m sure he is. The same isn’t familiar to me, but I’m sure you’ll find him." I think you mean name, here.
She ran out of the house, Kairi right on her heals; the pair ignored Elmyra’s surprised calls of concern in favor of speed. This should be heels, in reference to feet rather than recovery. Although in Aerith's case you can't really be sure....