"Cloud sighed and leaned against the wall. “Jack Maynard came after be..." There's a small mistake. I think you probably meant me and not be. ^^;;; Sorry, I tend to be a bit of a pick for these kind of things. btw I love your story! It's so hard to find stories that go nice and show, but still holds the attention of the readers. Even in published books. It makes me sad thinking about it. *sulks* *sigh* Anyhow! Congratulations on being two of the few people that can write good fanfics! X3 May you two live long healthy lives, which i suggest you dedicate to writing even more fanfics! Ack! I am talking to much again! >_
Not to be rude...
There's a small mistake. I think you probably meant me and not be.
^^;;;
Sorry, I tend to be a bit of a pick for these kind of things.
btw
I love your story! It's so hard to find stories that go nice and show, but still holds the attention of the readers. Even in published books. It makes me sad thinking about it. *sulks* *sigh* Anyhow! Congratulations on being two of the few people that can write good fanfics! X3 May you two live long healthy lives, which i suggest you dedicate to writing even more fanfics!
Ack! I am talking to much again! >_