I read the two chapters in a row XD; I think it is very interesting and I'm curious to see what you're going to write after. I can't have enough of Sora/Roxas interaction, especially this promising ^_^

No quibbles this time, except the sentence "Things grow easier as I begin to realize where you didn’t what to go when -" (in chp2), that is very confusing for me, and I can't say if it's normal or not. And you said "end of chapter 1" for the chapter 2 too.
Also, just so you know, chapter 2 isn't in your archive. I hope I'm not too annoying ^^;